Week 7_ Narration

Week 6_Intoduction

Mok-dong Stadium is called Mok-tak because it's small size. Actually in 2014, so many home runs are made in  Mok-dong Stadium. People believe that it is because of the size of Mok-dong Stadium.

1. Attention grabber -
I attracted the audience by describing a familiar situation to them, commonplace and powerful technology. Then I pointed out something most of them forget - they themselves are actually incredible computational powerhouses.

2. Explains the topic -
In the attention grabber I introduce all the elements of my topic: Human computational power, computer computational power, and the comparison of the two.

3. My thesis -
It is clear, direct and an argument. I thought the argument "Human brains are more powerful than computers" was too simple and nobody would dispute it. I changed it to a better argument, computers will NEVER be as powerful as the human brain.

Week 4,5

Week3_Classical Argument Outline

1. The introduction, which warms up the audience, establishes goodwill and rapport with the readers, and announces the general theme or thesis of the argument.

I will start with explanation about some bias about home run like certain stadium has low number of home runs or  some stadium is proper to hit home run because it is small. Small stadium has advantage for hitting a extra-base hits, but It does mean make home run which is can not be a home run in other stadiums. Then, how can hitters make so many home runs in small size of stadium.

2. The narration, which summarizes relevant background material, provides any information the audience needs to know about the environment and circumstances that produce the argument, and set up the stakes-what’s at risk in this question. In academic writing, this often takes the form of a literature review.

3. The confirmation,which lays out in a logical order (usually strongest to weakest or most obvious to most subtle) the claims that support the thesis, providing evidence for each claim.

I will start by examining how computers lack autonomy and therefore any achievement of a computer is really a human achievement. I will examine the ironic list of accomplishments of humans compared to that of computers. I will describe a set of problems that computers can't solve that humans can. I will examine the mathematical comparison between the computational power of the most powerful computers versus the human brain.

4. The refutation and concession, which looks at opposing viewpoints to the writer’s claims, anticipating objections from the audience, and allowing as much of the opposing viewpoints as possible without weakening the thesis.

I will concede that certain tasks computers obviously excel at, but in such a limited set of conditions that it doesn't matter. I will use the metaphor of a professional swimmer that can only excel on sunny days with 78% humidity and 22.3 degree water temperature in a room with no windows and a coach that has to micromanage every decision of the swimmer. 

5. The summation, which provides a strong conclusion, amplifying the force of the argument,  and showing the readers that this solution is the best at meeting the circumstances.

I will close with a summary of my previous points, then a brief consideration of the unquantifiable abilities of the human brain, like emotions and creativity that demonstrate a nuanced level of intelligence that computers have not even started to approach. I will end with a reaffirmation of my original thesis. 

Week3_Articulation

1) My argument 
I want to argue that so many homeruns in small size of stadiums are not just because of size of stadium. Mind set from the size of stadium like pressure to pitcher, make batters comfortable is important causes. 

2) How I found my argument 
 When I do research, I found a statistics which is about the number of homeruns in each stadium in Korea. From this stats, Mokdong is the best. Many people think size of Mokdong is the main cause of the stats. So, I want to know the real size of Mokdong which has the most number of homeruns . Real size of Mokdong Stadium does not different from average size of stadium size of Korea.

3) New research questions 
1) Average distance of homeruns in Mokdong.
2) Number of homeruns per game.


4) Connections to the Harvard Sampler
It is related to the human mind. I focus on the psychological effect to homerun.

Week3_Researching

Source:
http://blog.naver.com/kjhions?Redirect=Log&logNo=220121538209

My Topic:
So many homeruns in Mokdong is not only because of size of stadium.

What I hope to learn from this source:
How many homeruns does Park byeong-ho who is a homerun king in Korea hits in Mokdong?
Notes:

1. Mr. Park hits more than 35homeruns in Mokdong in this year.
2. Dae-gu, Cheong-ju, and Ma-san is smaller than Mokdong but Park didn't make much homeruns in those stadiums.

Final Thoughts:

Park byeong-ho hits many homeruns only in Mokdong. It means size of stadium is not much important than our thoughts.

Week2_Research proposal

Research proposal

What is my current topic?
*My topic is small stadium makes good effects for batter(like Coors field, Mokdong). My final persuasive essay will be 'So many home runs in Mokdong is not just because of size of stadium.'*
What are my guiding questions?
*Why so many home runs in Mokdong? How Park byeong-ho can hits 35homeruns only in Mokdong?*

What are my current thoughts?
*Small size of stadium makes batter comfortable. Pitchers make mistakes because they feel too much pressure in small size of stadiums.*

What is the opposition?
*Pitchers be more carefull in small size of stadiums.*



Week2_Researching

Researching

Source: Mokdong run does really exist?

http://sports.news.naver.com/sports/index.nhn?category=kbo&ctg=news&mod=read&office_id=295&article_id=0000001225

My Topic:
So many homeruns in Mokdong is not only because of size of stadium.

What I hope to learn from this source:
I want to know the real size of Mokdong stadium.
Notes:

1. Fence is lower than other stadiums.

Final Thoughts:

Mokdong is not small like Cheong-ju, but number of homeruns in Mokdong are more than in Cheong-ju. So the size is not important cause.

Week 1

Brain storming

Human mind

psychological-->good effect--> comfortable
                      --> bad effect--> anxiety
In sports, psychologiclal thing --> lots of affect to play